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Let me know what you think of my poem...

Asked by tvsnow 8 months ago, 2 answers.

Okay so I've decided to try something new. I've never writen a poem before, but decided I wanted to give it a try. Let me know what you think. Remember this is my first one so please be kind. happy

Oh and I have no title for it LOL

Her liver is...

dying
And inside she’s crying
Every night it’s the same
She’s drunk again
Trying to numb the pain
Working, cooking, and cleaning
Is that all life will bring?
Where’s her happiness
Where’s her smile
The one that her children adore
She can see a glimpse of happiness
But runs in fear of change
Not sure if she’s strong enough
To live that lonely life
Should she live in certain agony?
Or take that frightening chance?

Answered by gina916 on Mar 27, 2009, 04:01PM
97 answers

that to me seemed like you put a lot of emotion in it or feeling which ever and I think that is what makes a good poem and poet very good I like it

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Answered by victoria_233 on Mar 27, 2009, 03:57PM
749 answers

I think for your frist time its very gOod... I like it!!! =]

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