Tell me what you think about this poem too..xd

I love it when.
by lola

I love it when we're together.
I love it when you call.
I love it when we can't remember
why we're in love at all.
I love it when my name rolls off your tongue like a sigh.
I love it when you scream.
I love it when you keep me...

up at night
just so I can NOT get that call I've been expecting.
I love it when you make me crazy.
I love it when I scream at you.
you know I really love you, baby,
because lovin's all I know how to do.
I love it when you won't introduce me
to all of your close friends.
I love it when your presence suffocates me,
when you make me feel like we've reached the end.
I love it when you show up
with a new girl on your hip.
but I especially love it when
we both know that she's not worth shxt.
I love it when you tell me all about her,
you make me a jealous disgrace,
but it's hard to keep my cool
when I miss the way you taste.
I love it when you come crawling back
after you made me cry
and I love it when I take you back
and pretend I don't know why.

Okay. Tell me whatchu think! :]

It's simply AMAZING!!!

In essence it is quality. To improve upon it, cut it down to ten beats per line, using ten syllables. It will give the poem a steady rythmn and it will flow well. Trust me. Iambic pentameter is a sure sign of quality poetry.

the end is what made it great, but the end might need the begging to make it good

That is an awesome poem with a great meaning but to improve I would cut the lines so they are about equal length and try and make it rhym so the poem has a steady flow =] But it's a great poem non the less =] xx

Well, free verse is called free verse for a reason.
Idc about making it flow.
Not everything has to flow... Which is basically what makes it easy to relate to poetry in my opinion - because life wont always flow perfectly. I'm making my poetry more human-like in a way..

that is cool...!! brill awsome whatev I love it hehe...

yuh shud write a poem bowt likeing sumwun but being confused bowt them lykn you...just a idea I have that prob haha

I didnt reele like it what you were saying was nice it just had to be put in a different way