Is This A Good SOng?

Ok I wrote this song for my rock band. I just need to know if you think its good. A girl will be singing it and some solos for the instruments will be in there.the verses in parentheses will be repeated when I put (@) on a line just remeber that.thank you.

I can tell Thats it’s all to easy to break with so many things at stake since I found out it was to good to be true you would hate to see what I’ll do to you ( No! Im not going to cry!Did you really expect for me to weep I just turn over and go to sleep No! I’m not going to cry! ) You said you would be faithful to me Dont need to speak cause I can see that was all just a lie But just tell me why (@) My entire life I was ready to share Ever since I got your stare But now do you think that I care? If you think that she is right then shut the door and say goodnight! (@) (Instruments solo here no singing not part of the song) (@)

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Answer #1

I think it’s good

Answer #2

It seems like you’re rhyming for the sake of rhyming. It doesn’t read nicely and it doesn’t make sense in some parts.

You say:

“since I found out it was to good to be true you would hate to see what I’ll do to you ( No! Im not going to cry!Did you really expect for me to weep I just turn over and go to sleep”

In the first line you’re threatening to do something to whoever, which sounds a bit odd tbh, then on the third line you’re saying you’re just going to turn over and go to sleep. Contradicting yourself.

Same again here: “Dont need to speak cause I can see that was all just a lie But just tell me why”

You tell the person not to speak and then you ask them to tell you why.

It seems a bit clichéd to be honest. Get someone else to write the song.

Not trynna be nasty but if someone asks a question like this then I’m not going to lie.

Take care x

Answer #3

Pretty good. a little to “rhyme-y” for my taste. haaha. but I like it

Answer #4

yeah not bad but I would have to hear the beat :)

Answer #5

Not bad, meaningful… I like it

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