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It's a first draft, so feel free to be extremely harsh. :)
I hate you Because You Hate Me What did I do? Help me to see. I don't understand it I did nothing bad But you still hit me Just stop it, Dad. Why do you do this? It's evil It's sad You said that you hate me I love you too, Dad
What did You think?! :)
I think it is good and also sad at the same time. I f you are being hit you need to tell someone close to you so it can be stopped. Hope thing's get better for you I really want to stress to you that thing's could be better and should be for you.
Peace & love
Because it rhymed, it made me read it slowly... I hate having to do that. It makes me feel like a little kid. You should definately edit the words.
& BTW: Poems don't have to rhyme, you know.
"Hate" is a very strong word, I used it to portray the acidity od the father charachter. I dofully agree with your thoughts, hate is a strong word (like the PWT"S song, haha)
Sorry to miss interpret what was wrote but I still stand behind what I said. Abuse is wrong and needs to be addressed. Just my opinion.
Peace
I'm not being abused. My cousin was a victim, so I feel strongly about it...
I know poems don't always rhyme, most of mine don't, I wanted a change. :)
Hate is a strong word. I think you should change the words a bit.
I like it, it flows very nicely
xox Sika
I thought it was good =)
shes not getting hit!
its nice