What do you think of this poem? honest answers please

Everytime she looks your way,
You'll stammer and you'll choke,
Because this is pure beauty,
From a heart that never broke.

Her eyes are like blue swimming pools,
And you want to swim inside,
And they've held water over years,
Because she's never...

cried.

You know when you see her smile,
That she hasn't felt the pain,
That she would never hurt you like I do,
And you don't want to hurt again.

Best of all she wants you,
And let's you into her heart,
So soft and pink and bloody,
And willing from the start.

I know my eyes are swollen,
From all the times I've cried.
I know my heart it hardened up,
And it's blood supply has died.

My smile is always fake,
And my teeth cut through your skin,
And I never tell you secrets,
And I never let you in.

So I'm asking you to leave me,
And take a step above.
I want to help you for once,
And let you fall in love.

She'll let you in her heart,
And I want you to learn,
Because I have never let you,
Love me in return.

I'm not worth what she is,
So I'm telling you to proceed.
She's all you've ever wanted,
All you'll ever need.

Incredibly touching, it should become a song. You should work on your viewpoint of the person in the poem. Make it truly a someone who wants their love, to really be in love. sorry I don't understand what I wrote but great poem anyways.

I absolutely love your poem its extremly good ..

Its awesome I love it!

OMG this is so good it could be a song too!! I love it!! I wish I could write something like that!!

This lyric just like a song.
Its so great !
who created it? You?

that is beautiful
I love it
maybe if you added some piano it could be a very beautiful SONG

I was almost crying about it!

It is such a beautiful poem.

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