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What do you think about this poem I wrote??

Basketball Asked by luv2beme 2 months ago, 5 answers.

She stands in her room and cries. She watches the tears as they fall to the floor. She has cried so many times and she dosent know why. She has cried so many tears, that there is no more tears left for her to cry. But yet she still stands in her room and cries. She cries not water tears, but tears of blood. The tears that she has cried have now turned her floor red stained with blood. But she still cries and she doesnt know why. Was it her troubled past? Where her wrost fears come to life? She doesnt know why but she does know that the tears she has cried need to stop but how? How is the question she has asked for so many years.
She stands in her room and cries. She cries tears, tears of blood.

This peom I wrote has nothing to do with me it just kind a poped in my head ((lol)) please be honest and tell me what you think about it and please give me some pointers thanks!!

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Prom '08 My baby and me. Answered by peebsfiancee on May 03, 2008, 07:00PM
| 69 answers.

IT'S VERY GOOD FOR A BEGINNER!!! TRY NOT TO OVERUSE WORDS THOUGH. IN THS CASE : CRIES. BUT OTHER THAN THAT IT WAS GREAT, GOOD JOB. =]]

jim morrison Answered by nirvana12 on May 03, 2008, 07:06PM
| 163 answers.

that was great!! : )

Tiger cubs Answered by steph_is_utterly_mad on May 03, 2008, 07:54PM
| 150 answers.

I agree with peebsfiancee. It's overusing words, but apart from that, it's great!

Basketball Answered by luv2beme on May 03, 2008, 08:12PM
| 134 answers.

thanks

Halloween. Answered by underwaterophelia on May 04, 2008, 04:40PM
| 1160 answers.

Honestly, I don't think it's very good. It's very cliche, and unnecessarily overuses words.
Of course, if you like writing poetry, keep at it, and you'll get better and better.

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