What do you think(criticism)?

The lay in distraught,
The corpses fester,
Just in time for dinner,
In this dismal grot,
It's a real killer.

A Scene
So obscene,
They chow down like heathens,
Gorging themselves
Without given reason
To their solemn frown
Or...

indignant greed.

The corrupted seed lies within,
We are sick
have been tricked
Into cannibalism!

T'was written in a chartroom a year ago. The topic I was tagged(poetic tag, it's pretty fun) was Just in Time For Diner. It's not my best work. I figured I'ld give equal chance and let people critique me, let me know what they think. My work is copyright protected, so please do not steal any of my work.

Lol! smart move to protect it. this poem is indeed dark. I enjoyed reading it and if it isn't your best poem then you must have one heck of a brilliant mind.

no, it's no where near my to be honest. It was written over a year ago
thank you for your comment ^_^

this poem is ok but the way you broke up your poem kinda makes it awkward.

it's just the way I prefer to write, breaking things into stanzas
it gives more power to each part, makes it more renowned

might you elaborate what I might do better, please and thank you ^_^