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Please comment on my poem.

It hasn’t got a name, you can come up with one for it if you like.

Each time I cry, I hear all the angels laughs, and all the devils turn their backs. I noted what you like, and what you don’t, so I could please you in hope that hate me; you won’t. I changed my opinions, I changed my style, but still you tut and think I’m vile. I make a comment and you mock me, I fill with shame and still don’t know who I should be. After all you’ve put me through, Sometimes I want to give up on you. You spit and stare at me with evil eyes, but still I reply with a smile made of lies. You’re always right and I could never be, I want to be loved for who I am- I want the real me…to be set free.

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Answer #1

wow thats deep. thats exactly how I feel about this guy so it really touched me. keep on writing I love your style.

Answer #2

thats friggin amazing!!!

Answer #3

Nice job - hope you find happiness !!

Answer #4

wow thats really good! && very serious. I loveth it!! ;)

Answer #5

woah thats deep…but very professional and well written…love it :)

Answer #6

I love it!!! :) it’s very good!

Answer #7

loved it!!

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