Looking for literate people (part ii)

I told someone I would re-post this poem when I was completely done with it, so, here it is. Please do not take my work, it is Copy Write Protected.

Ever sounding chords of green,
Haunting my days,
Plaguing my dreams,
Calls to me like succubay.

Downcast,
Longing...

to taste
What's surveyed
Through emerald glass.

Chords of tyrants' song
Lace her corset
Hugging her hourglass frame,
Counting sands till fate is met,
Untamed,
Into a spiteful new dawn.

Trying to recoil;
Lilith my dark bride
Beckons my fall from Eden
-Soiled-
Humming her sweet lullaby
Of treason.

Wracked with her charm,
Overburdened I fall;
Sands run out
She ends her count,
Bares her arms
To entrap me in her paroles thrall.

Threads of prevarication
Unweave

Hell's passion
Raptures me

Raw fever prevails,
I embrace my porcelain sin,
My lips descend to taste her pale skin,
Bare to the heavens unveiled.

Down her swollen breast,
Lactating sweet henna for my soul,
Lustful nails rake me chest,
Drawing scarlet ink to sign
What's left of mine
To bestow.

I plant my corrupted seed within
Forest grim
ready for a blood stained genesis.

Let me know what you think ^^
Let me know if you think you understand the story it tells 1_~

definitely like the words you used, but at first I was thinking it was the wizard of oz then world of warcraft, and now I'm thinking a religious story. not sure exactly, but very interesting. good job

It seems to me like this is the story of a person (a man, I'm assuming) who is captivated by a woman. He knows that he should not be with her, however the temptation is too strong and they...you know.
His life was perfect before, but after he does what he does, he knows that it will not be the same. A few words hint at older times, which would explain why his world comes crashing down after he loses control on his urges. Things were much different back then.
I may be completely wrong, but this is how it seemed to me. The woman could, however, represent temptation for something else, like drugs, but I assumed that it was speaking literally by describing her and such.
Whether I was thinking the right thing or not, this is a very good poem. Keep writing.

Oh yes, I forgot to add that it is coming from a man's perspective
Though I'm female I seem to write from a man's perspective on poems such as this
You're close

The topic is about an extreme religious man(I guess you can say he's a Puritan) who longs for this woman whose not of his religion. She's so enticing, a temptress who beckons him haunts his thoughts, night day, a constant beckoning. finally lust over comes him he commits heresy against his God. He gives up his biblical beliefs to be with her(f**k her). He's impregnated her so he waits for the birth of his demonic b@$tard child, who was conceived in sin.