Alright i need your opinions on this poem

I need opinions on this poem cause I wrote it and I'm handing it in in a way so I need opinions...

Shut-eye

Another stroke
The artist paints
Colors bleed
And then he faints…

What would you do?
If you were him
On the ground
In light so...

dim

The colors you knew
Once so bright
Have fallen into
The land of dim light

Now all the hues
That blended so well
Spill from the mural,
Casting a spell

The rich tones of gray
Jump from the art
They dance in great rhythem
To the beat of a heart

The yellows and red
Though fire they mime
Tip toe in sync
To the brush strokes time

Now purples and blues
So seemingly calm
Ballet across
The artist’s arm

As the music pulses
The colors, they dance
Pirroeting in form
To a capturing trance

What would you do?
If you were him
On the ground
In light so dim

The colors you knew
Once so bright
Have fallen into
The land of dim light

Awake is the artist
He questions the scene from the sky
The colors dancing off the canvas
Oh how much we miss when we shut-eye.

omg thats really beautiful. you have major creativity and it flows so smoothly lol.

I thinks it's very well written.

Wow!