What do you think of all my poems?

No one knew about her
And all the shame she hides
About her family and her pride
No one cared about her

She tried telling someone
but no one gave a damn
No one seemed to understand
All the pain and suffering she had

She told someone how she felt
About how she loved him
the chances of him loving her were slim
He thought she was joking about this

He went and betrayed her
Broke her heart even more
Til she walked out that door
And never looked back at him

She regrets telling him now
She wishes she kept it inside
To let her heart search far and wide
For someone that would appreciate her

She wished so much
That she had to let love be
That girl was me
And how I dared to dream
---
You mean the world to me
I cant let you leave
I've always loved you
Why cant you just believe?

I would go anywhere
For your love
Fly to the top of a tower
Like a little dove

I would do anything
For your kiss
Say 'I Love You'
For that simple bliss

I would say anything
To have you hold me tight
Rock me gently
And make it alright

Thats why I have to make you see
That you mean the world to me
I need you in my life
So why cant we be?
---
I trusted you
But you broke my heart
Why didn't you love me?
Now Im missing a part
---
I feel
Such a rage
Like a bird
Trapped in a cage

No matter how hard
I struggle and try
Im still not
Able to fly

I feel so helpless
Cant someone save me
And let me out
So I can finally flee

We are all like birds
Wanting to believe
That we can all
Just finally leave.
---
The scars on my heart
Are starting to heal
Because you were there
To help make me feel

I was a helpless child
Until you came along
To pick me up
And make me strong

No one cared about me
Except for you
I couldnt believe it because
You were too good to be true

You were there
To help make me see
That im unique
And I have to be me
---
I've waited forever
For you to come here
To take me away
From all of my fear

I've waited so long
I dont think I can trust
But if your going to take me
I know that I must
---
I'll never win the fight
So leave the world in darkness,
Even though Im not ready
I'll find the light

I'll be an angel in the sky
Making my way to heaven,
Filled with hope
That someday I can fly

Fly away from my fears
All my pain,
All my suffering
finally get rid of my tears

Mabey one day
I'll win the fight,
And in heaven
I will stay
---
When I look in your eyes
All I can see is lies,
I thought I loved you
But I was wrong about that too

I should have know by now
That I was never found,
I was always lost
And it hurt me the most

All I ever wanted was love
And all my thoughts prove,
That I will never get my wish
I will never get true loves kiss
---
You loved me
But I told you
That we could never be,
And I believed that too

Things were getting in our way
Nothing was going right
So I prayed for a day
to hopefully get one night

One night to have fun
And for mr to be free
And let my spirit run
One night for me to become we

But right now I
cant stay
I want to lie
And say just one day.
---
I felt that pain
Of being alone
There was nothing to lose
And even less to gain

It felt as if I was naked
And it wasn't right
I had nothing to love
Or a reason to fight
---
You abused me
For so long
You forgot that
It was wrong

I tried to yell
But no one listened
Because there was
Nothing to tell

You always thought
I was lying,
But my heart was dying
Because I couldnt fight

My body will heal
But my brised and battered
Body will not feel
Because I am now gone
---
I called your name
As I continue to stare
At that long black road
But nothing was there

You left me
All alone
With my heart
As heavy as stone

Why did you
Give up on me
I said Im sorry
You didnt have to leave
---
I stare
At the starry sky,
Wishing I was there
Wishing I could fly

The night black
And the stars bright,
I see something I lack
Something out of sight

It seems so far away
And I just can't reach,
Although, I try each day
I still can't get over this feat

I need someone to help me
Touch the sky
So I can be free
And I don't have to lie
---
Help free me
From all this pain
Hurry now
Or it willbe in vain

All of these
Poisonous pills
And psycotic minds
Are making me ill

They fill me
With hate and fear
They dry up
All of my tears

All I need you to do
Is set my heart free
But whatever you do
Dont leave me
---
Angel of death
I see you in my dreams,
You wake me up
And make me scream

I see you in the night
So cold and black
You make me fight
For my life

You squeeze and crush me
Until I can not breathe
Why can't you leave me be?
I didn't do anything

I only have one life
So please give me one night
To fix my mistakes
And make everything alright
---
So beautiful
And carefree
can't you see
Why your my friend?

Your always ready
To lend a hand
And help people when
They cant find land

You make me
Feel so strong
When I stumble along
My winding path

That's why your my friend
So kind and caring
So bold and daring
And I love you just that same
---
You filled me with hate
you filled me with fear
You made me scream
Even though you weren't near

You made me feel worthless
You made me feel ill
You were there
To feed me those pills

I was so dark
I was so cold
But during my darkest days
I was still bold

I didn't give up
I didn't give in
I cursed you forever
Even though it was a sin
---
I was struck with terror
I wanted to look away,
But that icy blue stare
Kept me at bay.
It sent a chill
down my spine,
It was a new thrill
That I never felt before.
he could see into my soul
like an open window,
Im the dark he searched
But I couldn't let him know.
It was never there
The love he searched for,
I had it hidden somewhere
Where it would remain forever.
---
The rain beats me
It leaves scars on my back,
All the hate and fear
Come out with every loud smack.

The lightning overhead
Grasps at my breath,
It waits and waits
Just for my death.

I will not give in
The memories will not fade,
I have found love now
And I will no longer be your slave.

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sorry that its so long... these are all my other poems... tell me if you like em or hate em... and can I have some tips on writing better? thanks! <3

I think all of your peoms are good just keep up the good work

I like the first and lat one :-). Keep writing, it will keep your soul flying.

wow! your amazing I loved it it is so true I feel like tat sometimes and your so good...u should write a book I would totally bye it because ...

your poems arnt words written to debate they are meanings dealing with love and hate and everytime I read I feel like I need some more of your motivation to give me relation to everything and everyone whos has ever felt pain and fear or has ever cried a single tear and when I read the words that flow I no its not just for show because you write with your heart and carry it past the start and for this I thank you for helping me outa the dark and you have already left a mark on me because you have made me free and let me believe in all you write and as your pen takes flight no I believed and didnt percieve you as a poser but more of a chooser bout all the things that make us ache and all the things we try to make fake- thank you so much you r like a crutch to help support me and set me free...
ok so im not as good as you but its true that was amazing!

WOW NICE NICE
LOVE THE VERSES

aw there so cute lol
your rele good
dont let anyone steal those lol

You have a beautiful way of putting words together. I could actually here those words in a song. keep dreaming and let your spirit fly above the eagle underneat the clouds above, telling it like it is or what it once was.