What do you think about my poem I made up?

Feelings

The sadness in my eyes. The hurting in my heart. The fake smile on my face Keeping me from falling apart.

The feelings I get when im with you. The feelings I get when im not. The feelings I have for you Are all I got.

The way you take my breath away. The way you make me smile. The way you make me feel My life is worth while.

Answer #1

Omg I love it, I wish I could write poems like that, I did have a phase writin poems but they didnt sound right, but yehh that is a brilliant poem, well done x :)

Answer #2

I thnk it was pretty good. I like to write poems too.

Answer #3

I love it!!! great!!!

Answer #4

I love it!

Answer #5

Sounds great :)

The only thing that I would change is “all I got” to “all I have.”

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