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Please critique my poem
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What do you think of my poem? I know you write a lot of poems and stuff, so I thought you might have a good idea about wether or not it's any good...
When I awake in morning's gentle light,
You are the birds, beginning to take flight.
In those fuzzy-edged moments before the sun's rays,
You are there, to bring me out of my dull haze.
When my heart aches, so full of pain,
You are my saviour, my drought-breaking rain.
My salvation, my religion, my food and my cure,
When I am unsteady, you make me feel so sure.
My last hour I would want to spend with you,
Together untill the grass is heavy with dew.