Does anyone like this rock song I wrote?

I wrote this song for my rock band. it is copywrited I just want to see what everyone thinks. we just sstreet perform right now.

your making me do this
you see right through
I know just what you want
but I wont give it to you

Get out of my house!
Get off my floor!
Shut your mouth
And walk out out the door

Im not like the other girls
that whine and complain
I think you should run
because im sure im going insane

nothing you say is going to change my mind
your not as slick as you may think you are
make sure you know that im one of a kind
you better change your bad behavior

Get out of my house!
Get off my floor!
Shut your mouth
And walk out out the door

one minute you want me
and the next im not so sure
that you even see im different
from all the girls before.

(band solo.. then slow down again)

you better believe that in all ym grace
ill still slap that look right off your face
im still your honey I swhat you say
its all in black and white
and forget the shades of gray

Get out of my house!
Get off my floor!
Shut your mouth
And walk out out the door

You act so great
but I think its to late
for your your alabies
just telling lies!!!

so say goodnight
and get out of my sight
dont know how you can do this
is this really the way you want to stear?
no need to wait cause wont spill no tear

Get out of my house!
Get off my floor!
Shut your mouth
And walk out the door.

Pretty cool lyrics
love it
Sounds like it would a very good song =D
Best of luck with it
X x X

I love that song because its so true and it would any a great song and it was awesome

I'm not going to lie. Awful.

You completely switch perspectives half way through.

You say: "you better change your bad behavior / Get out of my house!"

which makes it sound like your talking to your child, as though you're their parent or something and then you go on to say: "Im not like the other girls / that whine and complain", which makes you sound like a moaning teenager.

The lyrics don't make sense and the song has no meaning. Don't give up your day job.

man I love it I can so relate to it in a way keep writing songs!