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What do you tink of my poam?

I wrote this poem and I need you to tell me if its good.need all the criticism I can get -would it matter- People say they love But not to me My walls are black My soul is to My heart is crumbling As my mind is melting The night creeps in The blood bleeds throw If I die tomorrow would it matter to you.

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Answer #1

I lkii it :] But its s0 sh0rt

Answer #2

OMG!that is soo depressing!! (but thats good) good job! thumbs up from me

Answer #3

I love that sooo much, especially the ending. that is really sad, but its in like a happy way, if you et what im saying… but I love it. ah~mazin jobb

Answer #4

It needs some fixing, I don’t know how you’d go about it, though.

-Would It Matter?-

People speak of love, But to me-It’s never expressed Anger built up, Solely out of detest

Blackened-Are the walls that surround My soul is lost-Never to be found My heart is crumbling, As my mind begins to melt

The night creeps in, The blood soaks through If I died tomorrow,
Would it matter to you?

I’m told I have a strange style, but that’s what I’d do. Fix it up a bit. :]