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Is this good for like a opening sentence? There are many interesting facts about my dog romeo that shows how wonderful golden retrievers are.

Its short so I need to add more, what kind of information should I put in there too.? Like talk abotu the dog alittle or what? Ha I don’t know Let me know!! Thanks guys(=

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You could try wording it differently, like instead of starting off with: there are many interesting facts… you could start with something like– My dog, Romeo, is a wonderful companion. His breed is one of the most well known of the dog breeds: the golden retriever. – and then you could go on to explain why golden retrievers are so well known (they are friendly, smart, good with kids, etc) and then begin explaining how Romeo fits that criteria. Good luck.

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