How good is this poem?

I liked it… but I thought it was a little cunfusing… I dont know how to make it sound better but I did want to tell u, I thought it was really cool

I have to agree with Heaven. Your poem needs a lot more content to it for it to be complete. As it is right now, the only thing I got from reading the poem is that time is running out. I don’t see any emotion linked to your poem, nor do I understand WHAT the whole reason for when will our time will come? is. So..

1). Add more content that explains what it is that’s expected to come, or what it is that people are waiting on.

2). Add in some emotion. If time is running out, how are the people feeling about it? Scared? Relieved? Anxious? Confused? Angry? Or how do they feel about their time not being there yet?

3). Error check your work. If you’re not sure on spelling, grammar, or proper word usage, paste your work in a word processor like Microsoft Word. It will check and give suggestions as needed.

Take care.

its really good I didn’t know guys write poems I write poems but I’m a girl

I agree with heavenlymind…but so far it’s pretty good :)