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What do you think about my poem?

(It was inspired by a girl who i had a big crush on, about a year ago.) Taylor

A beauty one can’t sell Each freckle tells a story. A great story to tell Of all your beautiful Glory.

You’re more precious then a gem With sparkling brown eyes. When I look into them I soar through the skies

We stood by the sink I watched you smile. It made me think Stay for awhile.

I heard you laugh It made me grin. We share a path A heart to win?

Don’t mind if you stare It’s alright with me. It shows you care Together we’ll be.

But now I know It’s clear to see. Even as I glow You don’t know me.

I don’t know you either And I wish I did. Should I bother? I’m just a kid.

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Answer #1

I think it’s good :)

Answer #2

Thank you. :)

Answer #3

I think its really cute…:)

Answer #4

wow that was pretty amazing

Answer #5

Good cute or Corny Cute?

Answer #6

Thank you. ^.^

Answer #7

lol, it’s a good cute..from what i got from it sounds like you may have a crush on this girl you sort of have your eyes on, but she doesnt really know or know you! You may have caught her looking at you but she never said a word nor have you! You may think you have no chance with her…but i beg to differ…;)

my advice on that is to just go for it hun, if it is meant to be then so be it…and if it isnt then what is worst case scenario…move on! :)

Answer #8

Omg I love it

Answer #9

awa it was realy nice : D you are a pro. : D

Answer #10

You got the message!! That’s exactly it, I had my eye on her but we didn’t know each other, there was wishful thinking involved, but words were never said. ^.^

Answer #11

I’ve been writing for almost 2 years now so I’ve had time to really find out what kind of poetic person I am. Now I stick strictly to a rhyme scheme of A, B. A,B.

Answer #12

I love it :) Its amazingly awesome

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