What's your opinion on my poem?

ok here's another one of my poems, I don't know this one isn't as powerful as the one before,but that's just me but I still like it

what's your opinion on it, all opinions are welcome even those brutal nasty ones
but be honest please

-vinnie

You take...

away all the pain
Watching every moment as you go insane,
Sudden tears of darkness swiftly fall
Within all the ruptured voices, all echoes call,

“Take my compassion in fear
And let it go into night time shear”,
“Then presume the glory of my hands of fate,
We look for moon light, but it’s too late”.

Now show me your sparkle of misery life
Dripping in crimson fluid, we share the knife,
Illuminating glows draw a poisonous glance
Into millions of butterflies, burning in dance,

Pain slowly trickles down my fictitious heart
Consuming every drop as life falls apart,
Tonight we sing for unholy eyes
Make sure to listen for the sound that dies,

Moving forward using all my love
Sinking to heaven, gazing above,
Our devotion, now six feet under
I hear what’s inside, the crashing of thunder,

You’ve taken the pain and all that is white
It makes you glow, it makes you bright,
Even in all evil essence, dark needs to shine
Please save the drowning entity, it’s all mine,

You took away all the pain,
Now watch me go instantly insane.

Awesome (:

Amazinggg!

Ahttp://www.so Pretty!!! I wish I could write like that..!!! I do math better than write ..er

it's great your very talented!!

Its very dark, but really what is the meaning of this poem?
To me it seems as if you would die for music, but yet your missinig something?
You are every talented, maybe I should let you here one of my poems!

very nice

wow this is great. really blew me away. I agree with oklahoma what is the meaning of the poem??

Very talented tho.. keep it up

that is really pretty

wow there arent words to describe how amazing that was you should send it to somebody and have them make a song of it unless you dont want to ^.^

I actually can't find one bad thing to say about this poem! Thumbs up!