What do you think of this poem/story that i wrote?

Its just simply called What hurts the most.

He was the cheese to her macaroni.
He was the best thing that ever came in her life.
He makes her laugh.
He makes her blush.
He makes her feel special.
He makes her smile.
But all of those didn't...

last too long.
He used to wait for her and make sure he says goodbye
but one day, he didn't.
He left her without a reason why.

She cried for days and tried to call him.
But he never replies.
She tried to talk to him any chance she gets,
but all he did was deny.
Where has she gone wrong?
Did he not like her anymore?
Did he felt bored of her?
She doesn't know why.

So she listens to a song that connects to her heart.
What hurts the most, was being so close,
and having so much to say,
and watching you walk away,
Never knowing,what could've been.
And not seeing that loving you
Is what I was trying' to do
A year and half passes by, he is still on her mind.
She still sees him around,
but they're strangers now.
He makes her puzzled.
He makes her sad.
He makes her cry.

So she listens to the song again.
It's hard to deal with the pain of losing you everywhere I go
But I'm doin' It
It's hard to force that smile when I see our old friends and I'm alone
Still Harder
Getting up, getting dressed, livin' with this regret
But I know if I could do it over
I would trade give away all the words that I saved in my heart
That I left unspoken
How can two people who were good friends can become strangers without a reason why...

'ivxx'
I've seen your advice
and I've also seen your age
START ACTING LIKE IT!

and I thought it was really interesting:D
I like your poem/story!

I like the first part it put a smile on my face the second part was prety good
But all up the powem/story was very good

lol ivxx

its got no rhyme
so I dont get the time
to read the whole thing
cause pain it will bring
and the guy above says things that arest true :P

and really cheese to her macaroni? ouch...yeah hurts the most

It's...well...cheesy...

lolsz...4real...oh...

As I fall asleep my mind drifts off

I dream that everything is perfect

That Life is fair and you are there

As I start to feel your arms around me

Our lips about to touch

I awake never to finish my thought

That in this moment I forgot

It was only a dream

I don't think anything is wrong with cheesy. Keep writing