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What do you think of this poem i wrote about my boyfriend?

Asked by fau about 1 month ago, 1 answer.

I wrote this last night my boyfriend and I broke up. We fight a lot and I feel like I cant trust him but I love him.

This air that keeps me breathing,
Is the foundation for my life.

The blood,
That courses through my viens.

The skin,
That covers my...

soul.

The air surrounds me.
I open my mouth to let it in.
It rapidly expands in my lungs.
I want it to stop but it keeps comming.

The same air that keeps me alive is now sufficating me,
Refusing the release its hold.
Threatening to explode within me.

All at once,
My lungs collapse.

The pain envelops me,
And I long for the same breath that once sufficated me.

I open my mouth again in anticipation.
Nothing...

I panic,
Still nothing...

I cry,
But my lungs remain empty.

Unconsciousness starts to take over.
My head becomes heavy,
I lose my balance.

Death whispers in my ear.
As my body hits the ground im longing to yell back at it.

The air pushes to get inside me.
Against my better judgement,
I let it in.

My breathing steadies.
Could the game be over?
Or will I find myself drained of blood once again?

My comfort increases.

As soon as life was given,
It is taken just as quickly.

Air passes through us all,
Monopolizing our time until it finds another victim.

I let it go,
Along with my life.

But somehow I remain living.

Answered by hottidoll on Oct 18, 2009, 04:52PM
123 answers

man, thats deep.

O.O

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