What do you think of my short story so far and tips on finshing it?

What do you think of my short story so far?It’s: If I could be butterfly,I would be the buteerfly of hope.To go to people who lost their way and hope and show them that if you always belive,pray and hope that dreams do come true.I would show them the path,the staircase and the true meaning of beliving and hope.If you ever are down,look out the window.Soon you will see a beautiful,shining butterfly leading you into a beautiful,breath-taking sight.Your dream coming true.What do you thnk?Be honest!

Answer #1

I loiked it so much. Maybe you would be good writing songs. I fi ever wanted a song written I think I’d ask you. I know that was a poem but me I always sing poems and that was the best poem I ever sang. So yeah it was awsome

Answer #2

I love it!!! But it seems a little more like a poem than a story! What is it about? If that was just an introduction than that REALLY hooked me!!! I really want to read more but like I said it seems more like a poem. BTW Great details!!! You seem like an AMAZING WRITER. So if or when you revise try making sure it sounds like a story instead of a poem but if you just want to leave it like that it’s great!!! I hope I wasn’t to harsh I feel bad now!!! I know I just blow up in blind madness!!! LOL JK but seriously I hope I wasn’t to harsh!!!1

Answer #3

I think I’ll leave it like that.Thx for answering!!!

Answer #4

I write poetry and writ songs and my bff says their great,but you know.Thx for answering!!!Username:delany11?I LOVED IT!!!

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