What do you think of my poem?

I need someones honest opinion on my poem.I wrote it the other day and I finished editing it a little while ago.I'm a little heartbroken because my boyfriend dumped me for another girl on the last day of school and it kind of explains my feelings right...

now...so yeah,enjoy:

Forbidden Tears

Forbidden Tears are here, though they shouldn’t be
You’re the one that doesn’t want me anymore
But no matter what, I love you

I cry Forbidden Tears
Just for you

I cry Forbidden Tears because
I want you close to me again
To feel your smooth skin against mine

I cry Forbidden Tears because
I long to hear your sweet voice,
Always singing to me

I cry Forbidden Tears because
I know I should hate you, with every fiber of my being
But I don’t

I cry Forbidden Tears because
I still love you and
I want desperately for you to love me

I pine for your warming smile
Caressing these eyes of mine
That cry Forbidden Tears

I cry Forbidden Tears
For my forbidden love of you

wierd...

Omg you should get this published its so awesome...im sorry about the break up

It's great, you really put your emotions into it, I can tell. I also write poems. FunMail me sometime if you want to hear. =p
On the Contrary, here's a poem that I wrote and it's the complete opposite of yours.

Just One-

Feelings well up inside
As you take the first stride
The heart filled with life
Takes a dive into a world of strife
Let the moment be full of bliss
Close your eyes for just one kiss

I like it and I have one pointer. Someone told me this a while back and it helped with my writing.
Try not to use the word 'I' so much, especially, not at the beginning of the sentences. Notice xxjulixx's poem.
Hope that helps,
Carol