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that was good, im only 14 and I dont pay much attention to anything but I like it
It's not too bad. I like a lot of your imagery, and it's very poignant. However, there are some lines that are confusing, I don't know if it's because of typos, or if English isn't your first language, or what.
Nor breath,nor motion we could take
and,
Eyes bulging in
are the lines that seem strange to me.
its more like abstract thought in your mind your thinking 2 hard just let it come out as a solid piece of art
Answer this Question: "What do you think of my poem?"





What do you think of my poem?
Never will I forget. Ever.
The exquisite sunlight blinded our eyes,
father's hand clasped the wheel like
an intimidated child clutching a toy.
Eyes bulging in with intense fear.
Nor breath,nor motion we could take,
twisted and pervers as idle as
a painted upside down car on a
painted red road.
there was a reason things were like this.
Bashed, bumped,bruised and bleeding.
The sweet tang of leather wafted
from the recently purchased vehice.
Outside was a swirl of gritty dust,
rising in the misty sky; and for
the first time I longed to be out there.
And when I did, no work of noble
not,could we say was done.
For on that day we had gone out
as three and come back as two.
Never will I forget. Ever.
Please tell me what you think!! also it is NOT supposed to rhyme, and enjambment is supposed to be used. our class were meant to write poems from our personal experiences.x