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What do you think about my poem?

Asked by kimgigglez about 1 year ago, 6 answers.

Friends 4...until you start listening

I could trust you and you should trust me,
Just be honest because the truth will set you free.
You can’t keep penalizing me, for what I didn’t do,
I may do things wrong but it takes two.
You can’t always be perfect,...

you can’t always be the best,
So relax and put the drama to rest.
When I talk, you listen, unless,
You’re head less, which means you’re ear less.
We’re friends, so it’s not all about you, it’s all about us,
You should of listened when I mentioned the word trust.

Answered by funadvice on May 14, 2008, 05:50PM
53906 answers

I really like it, it explains a lot.

Answered by m_ant29 on May 14, 2008, 05:54PM
3 answers

Sounds to me like you kinda like the guy, which means if you stick around you will kinda love him. Nice poem.

Answered by m_ant29 on May 14, 2008, 05:55PM
3 answers

It sounds to me like you really like ethe guy, and if you stick around him longer you will eventually really love him. Nice poem...good luck with that.

Answered by bella8564 on May 14, 2008, 06:00PM
11 answers

Its really nice and pretty! You should write more poems.

Answered by katwoman on May 14, 2008, 09:23PM
852 answers

I like it up until the end of 'so relax and put the drama to rest.'
but after those lines, probably not your best.
Up until then, it flowed really well
though, in some way, went all to Hell.

My bad, lol. But really, I think you've got a winner; maybe when you get to the last 4 lines, there may be too many words and the rhymes may be too close together but what do I know? I'm no expert but I do know what sounds good.

Good luck,
Carol