What do you think of my poem "melt"?

This is a poem I've just written called Melt.

I will love you languid
When you're tired
Stay in your white nest
All day if you like
I'll stare at you while you stare at your eyelids
I'll move over you like a sentient glacier

Or if you like
We'll...

make lavalamp love
I'll flow through you slow
Heat you from the inside
With the look in my eyes
I will love you languid
I'm made of syrup and warm wax
I'll melt myself over your skin
Delicately coating you in sugar
And heat

god that was intense
I love it though!!
good job

Thank you very much!

I liked it too. I could almost feel what you were saying. Cool.

The second half is stirring to ones passion.

Nice

good job, I'll have to let you hear the one I wrote, it was dedicated to one of my good friends that moved away.