What do you think of ths poem?

its called dissapear

I felt a tear roll down my cheek
I thought my cries would outleak.
my soul was now torn in 2
caz in my heart I still loved u.
I knoew this was gonna happen one day,
but still I count your steps as you walk away.
I...

sink 2 the floor, now on my knees.
im beggin my lips to stop you please.
I feel my heart aching inside,
yet in my mind I knew you lied.
I saw you with the girl next door,
and now you say you love her more.
You said she is the perfect girl.
Your making my life a messed up swirl
Your face is still eched in my mind,
and in my ear your last words chime.
Ill never forget your buetiful smile,
or how we always used to hang out 4 a while...
I see your last showdow,
as you disspear.
Ill never forget u.
You'll always b near.

please be honest, caz I was thinking of writing a book. thanks!

umm well it was allright...

its good, but not particularly unique,
I quite liked it though

I thought it was wonderful. I really did I could picture it in my mind. Good job you are very gifted with writting!

It's nice but I kind of see this stuff like everyday. Not specially different from an average poem, but it's better than a lot that I've seen.