What do you think of my pooem?

a poem I wrote after my heart was terribly breaking.

terribly breaking

if only you could see
what youre doing to me
my hearts teribbly breakking
fromm all this jealousyy

with your handd on her side
and your fingerss intwined
its just killing me...

inside
I cant bear to see

this is all I can hope for
this is all I can dreamm
that one day youll see
the girl for you is me

im still terribly breaking
from the pain you caused within
as my heart explodes like fireworks
everytime youse kiss
so deadlyy filled with bliss

the parts are everywhere
im shattered and im torn at the heart
I wouldd ask to be fixed
if I could only find the parts..

oo im just so terribly breaking
and its beyond my control
im just terribly breakingg
but I knew I couldnt have it all..

I love it.
seriously.

haha thankss(:

I like it, but its a little angsty

its good but it seems to me its rather cliche

I agree with chicken little