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What do you think about my poem?

i wanna go here! Asked by mix5angel about 1 year ago, 12 answers.

Tell me what you think this is my poem I wrote it!
Title:Please Stop!

Sometimes I just want the world to stop.
I need it to stop.
I beg it to stop.
I plead for it to.
Is there anyone who hears my cries of insanity?
STOP!
Please...I need for the yelling...

to stop.
I need to get my life in order.
The feelings are my mind tearing me apart.
It's too much for me to handel.
Stop I whisper to no one.
I can't take this bitter sweet feeling of love,hate,and confusion.
Just freeze life and let me catch up.
I'm moving in slow motion.
The world is moving too fast for me.I need it all to stop.
Everything is replaying in my head slowly.
I can feel the pain seep through to my face
the tears burn.
As they drop to the ground
They beg for the past to be repeated.
Sometimes I need the world to stop.
BUT IT DOSEN'T!
Stop...I plead butgo through time in my
Daze...
Like a movie my past is relived.
Big girls don't cry...Say what you ned to say...
* BUT I CRY!
*BUT I DON'T SPEAK
The world dosen't stop.

emo kids Answered by confused_lil_girl on Aug 11, 2008, 09:47AM
611 answers

I love it. it is very expressive

new pic of me Answered by fixmefever on Aug 11, 2008, 09:48AM
452 answers

wow. thats a nice poem...very strong..and stuff. lol. but its an AWESOME poem!!!

me...deal with it Answered by roxyrumble on Aug 11, 2008, 09:51AM
614 answers

I like it but I think a good thing to add to every poem is more discriptive like pensive and stuff like that. A wonderful poem but I know in my work I try to use that little edge. your a great writer.

just a drawing Answered by xxxemoxxxlifexxx on Aug 11, 2008, 09:57AM
415 answers

I like it 2 thumbs up lol

new pic of me Answered by fixmefever on Aug 11, 2008, 10:03AM
452 answers

how could anyone think its a bad poem? I think its tigger-rific! lol

Answered by widner2007 on Aug 11, 2008, 10:38AM
135 answers

what happend to that rythms
and all
lol
you a good writer speaking from da braini like that
but I guess you could do better by looking around you hearing the sounds
take it from your heart not da brain lke this:
(look for a poem Name : To a pretty girl)
looking forward to your advice

i love bmw Answered by bmw on Aug 11, 2008, 11:25AM
826 answers

It's a nice poem I like it happy

Comment for armenia_guy's profile Answered by summerrainn on Aug 11, 2008, 11:25AM
94 answers

You definately are a girl born with a pen in hand, beautiful writting, so true, hugs to you my dear, Summerrainn

Whaa? Answered by jlee4jb on Aug 11, 2008, 12:13PM
70 answers

I...LUV IT!!!

Have you ever heard of Mibba.com?

Check it out! It's a creative writing web site,(I have an account btw =) ) where you can post your poems,articels,storys,etc.
you'd fit in very well my dear. ^_^

Me, myslelf and I Answered by luret on Aug 11, 2008, 02:07PM
277 answers

Its wonderful!
I can't stop saying that you're a great writer!
KEEP IT UP!!!

i dun smile much... so here's my best one! Answered by butterfly_kiss3z on Aug 12, 2008, 03:46PM
1307 answers

so strong and deep, plus it's filled with emotions! I swear you can enter this in a contest - if you know of any :P it's real powerful and I'm sure many can relate to the situation! keep writing, you're real talented =)

smiles and laughs Answered by cmjcarcam on Nov 03, 2008, 05:18PM
819 answers

woah this is really deep
I love it
mma read it again
geez I'm going to call like scholastic or something lol

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