What do you think of this poem?

falling faster
sinking lower
quick sand captures me by the ankles
and pulls me down
im drowning in tears
and suffercating myself in the darkness
my open veins let me breath
allow me to see into the night
but then I bleed
my blood flows like untamed waters
I fall limp
my visions blurred
no one can save me now
im untouchable
defeated by my own sins
crushed by my fears
I lay on the cold wooden floor
crying, slowly dieing
until I can see no more

It's a little dark I must say, but it seems very emotional.