Portland girl (new song)

so im slowly putting together a solo cd because my band likes to take their sweet aśś time doin shît. So here is a song I wrote about a girl that I lost a long time ago. Heres Portland Girl comments suggestions and smartasś comments?

Portland Wont Be...

Callin For Me
It doesnt look like she fallin for me
That portland girl and me will never be

Took a long hit from a peace pipe
As the sunshine hits my sports car
I got a brain full of LSD and a couple of butterflies
tumbling in my stomach, the tears in my eyes
Well I just lost my girl today
She says thats life honey

Portland wont be callin for me
It doesnt look like shes fallin for me
That portland girl and me will never be

So im stuck in california riding my broken wings
While shes all perfumed up that pretty thing
So live and learn
Sit and burn
Looks like I finally got beat
Im just an angry young man
And she was so sweet

Babe ill work on my looks
Read all your books
Do all that I can to be your biggest fan

Portland wont be callin for me
It doesnt look like shes fallin me
That portland girl and me

red rover
red rover
Wont you send her back over
Why did I have to drive her away?

So come on tequila sour
Come around and keep me low
She spendin her nights
Under stary lights
And im sure shes not alone...

thats good...=]
sad...but good