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It seems I spend more time critiquing others then receiving the criticism myself...I'm not really one to post my poetry...but here's your chance...tell me what you think:

My weary mind passed through into another world, another time The visions that enchanted me were morose, but yet sublime Through forests deep and intricate my aching heart could roam And silent whispers called to me and told me I was home

It seems I walked for ages, when I saw a wondrous sight And thought my eyes deceived me in the failing of the light But there he stood, great and stark, protector of the wood I had no need to speak a word, the shepherd understood

He led me to an unusual place, where the Calendula grew And showed to me the abandoned tomb of someone I once knew My tears flowed down like a river stream, and drowned me in regret It pained me to remember, so I had let myself forget

My fingers softly brushed across my lordship's name in stone And for the moment I suffered like I was once more left alone But something summoned my attention, a solitary plea My king begged me not to despair, for he was still with me