Poem ~<3

kay.

is this poem any good??

hold it tightly
don't lose your grip
close your eyes
and just feel it rip

a fresh new start
the same old trip
bite in deeper
and watch it drip

hey as you took time for me I will for you also!

hows this?

hold it in hand with grip so tight
close your eyes looking blind down the sights
with a target in range get ready to plunder
letting rip of the trigger be ready for thunder.

a fresh new start for the recent fallen
its the same old trip for us, the called upon
as we bite in deeper like an undead feeding
and we watch it drip as it then starts bleeding.