New poem, what do you think?

I can hear the rain on my window
It sounds like the outside world is taking the blows
Leaving me , holy and alone
Chewing away on flesh and bone
And I feel this indescribable pain
Hidden deep inside, driving me insane
And I say to myself 'this will be...

the day.
I will make the liars pay.
But I made the choice not to tell a soul
To let all my morals and values go
Read my lips and listen close
because I lost m mind a long time ago
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I've hung he angels from he rafters
I'm watching the seraphyms writhing
I know that they are lost
And so am I.
I can smell their tears,
Sweat, blood and regret
and I hear them scream,
cry to their god
But you see, m hate and pain
Its digging into me
And it's like I can't breathe
and I can't let myself cry,
---
I have to slowly rip off the angels wings, and hear them scream...
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And in this cold dark place
Where it is safe
And existence has been erased
Everything must eventually break..
---
Spreading prayer like diseases
And sacrificing the seized
Satisfying his need for genocide
Infecting millions like plagues
And coming up with new ways
Disguising his tastes
For Homicide
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If I want to be-
If I want to see-
If I want to speak-
I have to sacrifice EVERYTHING

- Myzarri

it's really stupid! Srry that's just my opinion because you had to ask!!

it's pretty good. =]
I enjoyed it.

thank you very much. = )

makes no sense.

I like the first part
:]
It doesnt fit to well together, it gets quite confusing
Work on that and its good
xD

I never make sense, but yeah, I need to work on that.

Very nice poem!
Keep it up and maybe you can sell poetry.

That would be cool. I've got notebooks full of poetry. Maybe I have too much time on my hands. Or too much on my mind. One of the two.

I love it.so you write poetry to?the same type I do to.have anymore?