My poem

how do you like this poem I wrote? please the truth even if it's bad.

Why doesn't he notice
why don't he care
I love him for so much more than his hair
his smile
his eyes
he's absolutly perfect for my life
he's sweet
he's charming
oh how I...

would love to call him my darling
it wouldn't take much
I don't ask for a lot
not diamonds or the world
really all I want is to be his baby girl
maybe if he knew how I truely felt
his feelings would change and make my heart melt
how cute we would be together
everybody would smile
of course some would be jealous
but I think it would be worth while
he's amazing
nothing left to say
maybe if I keep dreaming,
he'll be mine one day.

Awww blesss... thatss sooo sweettt...proud of yu...no frettinnn...my goshhh...
im such a postion werr I lykk diss guy foorrr 5 yrrzzz...n heee lykddd me inda beginin...buhhh nowww weee meet wunce in the... and even then itss public and we meet and sai hi . how yu doin...n dem stuff... buh styll sweet...xxx

I really like it. =)

AWW! that's sooo sweet! I know exactly how you feel. I love this poem, it's my new favorite here on FunAdvice. omg, seriously, AWE-SOME!

its okay,
just take out the hair bit,
or do something different there,
it gets better towrads the end,
but you somehow need to make it exciting from the beginning,
but your true feelings are in it so I wish you all the best I hope he does notice you change his ways for you,
all the best x

Aww... that's cute!!! I don't get the hair part though... Might want to take that out!

♥ and Peace!

I know that hair part doesnt seem important but it is because a lot of people tell him they love his hair and I need him to know I like for more than that

I agree with the whole hair thing!
But if you took that part out it would be better!
I still really like it!
It's very sweet!
I know how you feel!

niicee ! :D I enjoyed it :D anymore ? lol :D I got a few songs written out if ya want to look ?

it's sooo sweet, maybe it could use a little more figurative lanuage but anywayz it really good

well done!

he's finally mine now (: