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My poem, what do you think?

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Hey guys, what do you think of my poem? Honestly. It's my first one:$

When I first heard your name, When I first saw your face on the cam, damn baby, it's not a shame but, the feelings I got for you, are so pure, they so real, they always heal the pain, the pain I no longer have, When you walked into my life, I knew right then, I want to be your wife, To be your only one, for us to have a daughter or maybe a son, Baby I never felt like this before, When I feel your arms around my waist, and then everything around me moves at a slow pace, As your lips touch mine, boy you just passed the line, but I'm happy you did, baby where did you hide? Not in my mind, not in my soul, but now I found you, you were there waiting for me, because I think we were meant to be, life without you was alright, but baby now that I have you, hold onto me so damn tight, and never let go, because one day I hope you do no, how much I love you, and I can't get enough of you, because your more precious than a gold ring, Baby I have a serect, you are my king.

Thank you(L)!