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Is this poem ok?

Asked by xhopewontfade202 4 months ago, 5 answers.

not one of my best but poem I wrote,,,

the return

with ocean blue skies
send shivers down my spine
has they remind me of you
with your twinkling eyes

for days without you
is centuries in my life
I guess you can tell
im not taking it well

now I...

lay awake
wishing for god sake
you will come home one day

for your arms are my home
and your appearance is my wish
wouldnt that be nice
just one more kiss...

Answered by rawratyou on Jul 24, 2009, 07:41PM

Very Beautiful happy

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Answered by volleeit18 on Jul 24, 2009, 01:05PM
1152 answers

oh. my. god. you have no idea how much that was like straight from my life. I can totally relate I love it its fantastic!!! oh my gosh its so ironic how perfect it is hahaha

Answered by emogirl95 on Jul 24, 2009, 01:09PM
237 answers

ya I have to agree it is pretty perfect and I do luv it!! =]

Answered by wickedchic15 on Jul 24, 2009, 02:01PM
128 answers

very nice happy

Answered by funadvice on Jul 24, 2009, 06:58PM
53985 answers

I love it! it's beautiful.

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