Is this a good song?

Girl I'm in love with you baby.
And I want you to know.
That I'm hooked on your body.
And I'm trying to be your's.

(Radio killa, killa, killa)
(Oh yessir, yessir)

We beat it up like gorillas.
(Trick, where you at? Oh yessir)

She going'...

right, she going' left.
I had her here, to myself.
I got it on it, like I want it.
She rolled the beat like a (woman?)
Cameras up, cameras flash.
I'm tispy, tryna last.
I wanna change your name to Mrs. Nash.
Cause there's nothing left to say.

She rockin' that thing like.
She rockin' that thing like.
There's nothing I can say.
She rockin' that thing like.
She rockin' that thing like.
There's nothing I can say.
She's just rockin' that thing like.

We out the door, we in the car.
She under my shirt, I'm under her bra.
She said take it if you want it.
Then we make love 'til the first sight of morning.
So we did it, done it, get it, got it.
Ooh, ooh, ooh.
Baby said do it 'til her body don't move.
Baby, ooh. Baby ooh.

She rockin' that thing like.
She rockin' that thing like.
There's nothing I can say.
She rockin' that thing like.
She rockin' that thing like.
There's nothing I can say.
She's just rockin' that thing like.

Girl I'm in love with you baby.
And I want you to know.
That I'm hooked on your body.
And I'm trying to be your's.
Hear my words for their works.
Aint just tryna get in your clothes.
Okay, I'm lying. Damn you fine.
And uhm..

She rockin' that thing like.
She rockin' that thing like.
There's nothing I can say.
She rockin' that thing like.
She rockin' that thing like.
There's nothing I can say.
She's just rockin' that thing like.

Take me, I'm your's (Shawty)
As we rock to the left, rock to the right.
Lend me your body, I'ma rock it all night.
Don't leave us on this floor shawty.
The door's to the left, I'm parked on the right.
Come and, holla back, take your girls to the night.

The way you rockin' that up in this club.
I swear you gon' make a n* fall in love.
The way you rockin' that up in this club.
I swear you gon' make a n* fall in love, love.

its not to bad...

I would begin with something more ear cacthing in the beginning. The rest seems fine. How are you singing it hip hop, rapping, slow jam, pop?

Trying to be in love is easy with you.
(something like that) do something different in the beginning;

Girl I'm in love with you baby.
And I want you to know.
That I'm hooked on your body.
And I'm trying to be your's.

(Radio killa, killa, killa)
(Oh yessir, yessir)

We beat it up like gorillas.
(Trick, where you at? Oh yessir)

I would begin with something more ear cacthing in the beginning. The rest seems fine. How are you singing it hip hop, rapping, slow jam, pop?

Trying to be in love is easy with you.
(something like that) do something different in the beginning;

Girl I'm in love with you baby.
And I want you to know.
That I'm hooked on your body.
And I'm trying to be your's.

(Radio killa, killa, killa)
(Oh yessir, yessir)

We beat it up like gorillas.
(Trick, where you at? Oh yessir)

That song is just another reason why mainstream rb/hip-hop fails.