Is this a good song?

Ok I wrote this song for my rock band. I just need to know if you think its good. A girl will be singing it and some solos for the instruments will be in there.the verses in parentheses will be repeated when I put (@) on a line just remeber that.thank...

you.

I can tell
Thats it's all to easy to break
with so many things at stake
since I found out it was to good to be true you would hate to see what I'll do to you
( No! Im not going to cry!Did you really expect for me to weep
I just turn over and go to sleep
No! I'm not going to cry! )
You said you would be faithful to me
Dont need to speak cause I can see
that was all just a lie
But just tell me why
(@)
My entire life I was ready to share
Ever since I got your stare
But now do you think that I care?
If you think that she is right
then shut the door and say goodnight!
(@)
(Instruments solo here no singing not part of the song)
(@)

I think it's good

Not bad, meaningful... I like it

yeah not bad but I would have to hear the beat

It seems like you're rhyming for the sake of rhyming. It doesn't read nicely and it doesn't make sense in some parts.

You say:

since I found out it was to good to be true you would hate to see what I'll do to you
( No! Im not going to cry!Did you really expect for me to weep
I just turn over and go to sleep

In the first line you're threatening to do something to whoever, which sounds a bit odd tbh, then on the third line you're saying you're just going to turn over and go to sleep. Contradicting yourself.

Same again here:
Dont need to speak cause I can see
that was all just a lie
But just tell me why

You tell the person not to speak and then you ask them to tell you why.

It seems a bit clichéd to be honest. Get someone else to write the song.

Not trynna be nasty but if someone asks a question like this then I'm not going to lie.

Take care x

Pretty good. a little to rhyme-y for my taste. haaha. but I like it