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Is my poem any good?

nananananana Asked by brujahminx 4 months ago, 5 answers.

Every tear from my eyes feels like razors apon my skin
Every heartbeat feels like an explosion
The constant pain in my head has become unbearable
But what hurts the most is the knife in my back
The blood of betrayl dripping,,tainting everything around me
This veil of darkness pulling me further from myself
Covering any light that cares enough to shine my way
I see your guilty hand reach for me but I cant grasp it
I see your sorry fire burn near me but I feel only the cold
I've lost my way
The darkness consumes me
I lay down on the bed of thorns and embrace the darkness
Lost in my own head,this jail I made for myself
Waiting for a light strong enough to break though
But now...I sleep

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Hello Answered by nandu_nair on May 13, 2008, 10:51PM
| 40 answers.

not bad. But check the correct spelling

Three Days Grace Answered by matt18091 on May 14, 2008, 04:57AM
| 438 answers.

Haha...yup

Thunder Robot Answered by funadvice on May 14, 2008, 09:13AM
| 42467 answers.

I love it! I write a lot too! here check it out... http://www.poetry.com/Publications/display.asp?ID=P8835375&BN=999&PN=1

I got the inspiration from my horoscope one day It makes me sound like a murderer but hey -its good!

Goregasmik Answered by goregasmik on May 14, 2008, 11:17AM
| 10 answers.

Sounds pretty good.

♥ belle ♥ Answered by cupcake5 on May 14, 2008, 02:22PM
| 568 answers.

wow...that was soo good..I luved it! its hard to find somebody who also likes to write poetry from what seems that comes from the heart..did it? bc when its that good..its bc your inspired by something or something motivates you..I write poetry myself.

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