Input and criticism on my lyrics?

can you tell me what you think about these lyrics and what I could change about them to make them better!

We are the ones who get left behind
We are the ones who are forgotten
We are the ones who hide in fear
We are the ones who won’t escape tonight

Left behind in the dirt and the mud
We crawl for cover and hide in fear
We won’t come out for you no more
We’re all done with sadistic wh#res
The fight has left our bones
And we won’t put up with sh!t from you
We sit back and watch the show
We add our bit to the musical and watch the show

We are the ones who get left behind
We are the ones who are forgotten
We are the ones who hide in fear
We are the ones who won’t escape tonight

We run for cover and find no comfort
We are left with nothing
We are left for dead and die tonight

Take this rose and close your eyes
Try to remember this situation for a time
Pull the trigger and say goodbye
And forget the ones left behind
Kiss me on the cheek and say goodbye
I’ll stay beside you for a life if we decide

We are the ones who get left behind
We are the ones who are forgotten
We are the ones who hide in fear
We are the ones who won’t escape tonight

We are the ones who stare into the sun
We are the ones who stare at stars
We are the ones with shattered dreams
We are the ones who say goodbye this time

wow you're really good! I don't know if you meant to do this but:

Pull the trigger and say goodbye
And forget the ones left behind
Kiss me on the cheek and say goodbye

those lines...you mention "and say goodbye" twice. I think you should think about not putting that phrase twice in one verse. But I don't know maybe you meant it to be that way?
Gluck and good job!

Take this rose and close your eyes
Try to remember this situation for a time
Pull the trigger and say goodbye
And forget the ones left behind
Kiss me on the cheek and dry your eyes
I’ll stay beside you for a life if we decide

how about this???

I do like your style too! you are talented. Glad to see you using it I like your last suggestion and agree with the gal who mentioned both goodbyes.

Yes, I like it! I don't know the tune, but it seems a bit repetitive and doesn't flow very well when read aloud, but it may just be because I don't know the tune! How about this for the chorus so it's not so repetitive (again, if it doesn't fit the tune, stick with what you have)...

We are the ones who get left behind
The only ones who are forgotten
And if we are the ones who hide in fear
We'll be the ones who don't escape tonight.

Let me know what you think! and good job on the rest

thats amazing but put take out kiss goodbye

You are very talented, however, I do not have any advice on changing anything. I think whatever flow your heart feels is what you should stick with.

So sad. Made me want to cry, but all good songs that are sad make me want to cry. Good job!