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How i can make this into more of a poem.

The Bean in Chicago my hometown Asked by mariachitown about 1 year ago, 3 answers.

Does anyone know how I can make this into more of a poem...
Right now its just like hmmm...lines?

I love the way you give me chills when I talk to you
I love the way you make me feel like i’ve never felt before
I love the way I smile so big it hurts...

when I think about you
I love the way your voice can make me forget everything around me
I love the way you leave me speechless
I love the way you don’t care how stupid I can be
I love the way you’re not afraid to be yourself
I love the way my world stops when I hear your voice
I love the way you talk, laugh, and smile
I love the way you can turn a bad day into the best day
I love the way we can be on the phone have nothing to say but never hang up
I love the way when I think about you I almost cry cause I miss you so much

I want to go here Answered by ultraviolet14 on Sep 22, 2008, 10:51PM
102 answers

I'm so sorry I'm no help but I just have to say that's the sweetest thing I've ever read hehe I hope you can get better help then me

Answered by walterppk on Sep 23, 2008, 12:09AM
4 answers

try taking out every secound I love th way

What's up Answered by pacman on Sep 23, 2008, 12:49AM
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I do a lot of writting. The way you have it set up, if you want to maintain the structure you have. Of reverse the order of some of the lines... like...

I love the way you talk to me, you give me chills
I love the way you make me feel like I've never before, gives me thrills
I love the way when I think of you its hurts so much I smile so wide
I love the way when I hear your voice nothing else matters its all put to the side

Try that or the every other line rthyme, or try walerppk suggestion. Hope that helps some if not hit me up on funmail and I'll try to help you some more, but what you have is great, meaningful and comes from your heart and that's what writing is all about. Good luck.

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i can always make you smile :) when im not being emo lolmy fav poem!If it don't make dollars - It don't make cents!

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