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Does my poem suck?

Asked by mia4evr over 2 years ago, 5 answers.

You're my nightmare, I close my eyes and you're there.
You're my nightmare. In my dreams you're everywhere...
The screaming and yelling, tearing and bleeding.
You're my nightmare... The pain in my stare.

Answered by saw3rules on Oct 02, 2007, 06:06PM
126 answers

no its pretty good you might want to add a couple more verses in the beginning or think of a replacement fo the seccond you're my night mare

Answered by mia4evr on Oct 02, 2007, 06:59PM
33 answers

okays...thanks!

Answered by missariaaaa on Oct 02, 2007, 07:19PM
127 answers

Love it!

Answered by deathisbetterthenlifebytwichy on Oct 02, 2007, 07:43PM
49 answers

good one... just a little modification and you got it

Answered by underwaterophelia on Oct 03, 2007, 02:32PM
1843 answers

Yeah, this does pretty much suck. It's not original, and the repetition is unneeded. Fortunately, just because you write one bad poem doesn't mean all of your other ones will be bad. Keep practicing.