What are your thoughts on my poem?

I just wrote this one, I hope the subject is obvious.

Reached my hand up between those legs
Pressed my clean hands against
Your dirty cervix
This isn't familiar at all, I'm afraid.

But when I
I
Oooh, when I walk out there
I could slide right under the leaves
And the dirt and then I would
Feel warm and unborn and
Sounds would be muffled

Or perhaps I'll just slip under
The foam for a minute
Yes.
This briny gritty teaming with life splash
Is the womb from which I must have
Burst forth.

Please tell me how you feel about it, good or bad.

I love ''and the dirt and then I would, Feel warm and unborn and...'
it just slides right off your tongue.

It took me a few minutes to take it all in and realize how the different sections relate. I really like this one, good job!

haha this poem is pretty nifty :]

Thank you!

Wow it is really intimate.. and I feel the same as Sika.. took me a few minutes to really.. get int there you know.. Lol. But Yehh.. I really like it. I love all the enjambment and how the lines 'flow' into eachother.. it kind of goes with what it means..

Its really kl =]

very... descriptive...

What do you mean by that?

I think she means that it's very open and intimate. Not sure though Lol

x

I think your poem is lame

Ok, that's fine, but could you explain why, or what you don't like about it?
Otherwise your comment is pretty useless.

ITS SO STUPID OJMG YOU SO PRETENTIOUS EVEN WRITING THAT .. OMG THATS SO SHIZ OMG !