Welcome!


Join more than 152,000 members on FunAdvice to ask questions, share advice, photos and make new friends today.
FunAdvice RSS for this page:
Rss_feed

Another of my poems

Me on the rockss Asked by britz14 about 1 year ago, 2 answers.

People have said this is my best poem, but I am not so sure.
I wouldn't mind some constructive criticism.

Speakers on full blast,
Seemingly emitting ear-splitting Silence
Drowned out by the noise of thoughts,
Swirling, bouncing around our...

head,
Screaming to be heard.
Kept inside, it builds up,
Waiting for the moment.
One too many,
It bursts out
Too much energy...
too soon
The sound is silenced before it reaches the lips,
An amplifier turned off.
Closed to the world
A life blown out

It's titled Heart Attack.

Thankyou for reading,
Britz

Druid of Balance Answered by danielsiskandfriends on Aug 27, 2008, 06:49AM
38 answers

Again, simply beautiful!

heh Answered by maria222 on Aug 27, 2008, 07:02AM
19 answers

its a little, strange

Answer this Question: "Another of my poems"

Your Answer: HTML is not allowed.



Writing & Literature Photos

my fav poem!emo poemjust_another_single_chick

Share this question

Copy and paste this code:
It will display on your blog or site like this:
Another of my poems